Wednesday, 28 November 2012

Seven Steps To Clearer Judgment Writing The Honourable Justice Linda Dessau, Family Court of Australia



His Honour Judge Tom Wodak, County Court of Victoria
Judgment writing is a skill that can be learned, practised, improved and refined.  
A well-structured judgment enhances clarity and conciseness, and helps ensure 
that the reasoning process is complete.  But how do judicial officers decide what 
to include and how best to express it?  In this essay the authors provide a useful 
guide to judgment writing by breaking the task into seven distinct steps.  These 
seven steps provide a framework for the content and structure of clear and 
transparent judgments. 
Introduction
"Writing is easy.  All you do is look at the blank page
until the drops of blood form on your forehead."
Red Smith 
Judges must give reasons.

1
  This essay, however, is not about the whys and wherefores of that 
basic premise.  It is about the reason-giving process itself, in particular in written form. 
judgment writing is more an art than a science.  It can be learned, practised, improved and 
refined, and many judges welcome the opportunity to hone their writing skills. judgments are, 
after all, the product of their judicial endeavour.  They are available to be read, considered and 
analysed, into the future as well as immediately. 
There is every motivation for judges to communicate well.  Firstly, the parties to litigation need 
to understand the result and the reasons for it.  Transparency is essential to our system of law 
and the public's confidence in it.  Secondly, clear, well-written decisions are integral to the 
common law and the development of precedent through case law. 
There are many articles and books about judgment writing.
2
 We shall not attempt to repeat 
them, but rather to encapsulate their essential points and distil them into a pragmatic guide to 
clearer writing.
3
 Our seven steps traverse the two main components of clear judgment writing - 
the structure and the content.  At the outset, we emphasise the significance of structure: a well structured judgment enhances clarity and conciseness, and helps ensure that the reasoning 
process is complete. 
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1 Pettit v Dunkley [1971] 1 NSWLR 376 at 382 per Asprey JA. 
2 See, for example, Sir Frank Kitto, 'Why Write judgments", reprinted in this collection, p 69; L Mailhot and JD Carnwarth, 
Decisions, Decisions - A Handbook for Judicial Writing, 1998 Les Editions Yvon Blais Inc, Canada; Professor E Berry, 
Writing Reasons - A Handbook for Judges, 1998, E-M Press, Quebec; Justice M Kirby, "On the Writing of judgments' 
(1990) 64 Australian Law Journal 691;  Professor E Campbell, "Reasons for judgment: Some Consumer 
Perspectives"(2003)  77 Australian Law journal  62; Professor E Campbell and Professor HP Lee,  The Australian
judiciary, 200 1, Cambridge University Press, Melbourne. 
3 We do not profess to rank among the country's best legal writers.  But we have been fortunate enough to attend extended 
judgment writing courses and workshops, in the course of which we have been exposed to excellent teaching, and imbued 
with enthusiasm to pursue the quest, not necessarily for more brilliant judgments, but for clearer, more comprehensible 
writing. 2
Just like a well-written short story or play, a judgment requires an introduction, a middle and an 
end.  Lord Denning described the structure as follows:

"I try to make my judgments live ... I start my judgment, as it were, with a 
prologue - as the chorus does in one of Shakespeare's plays - to introduce 
the story.  Then I go from act to act as Shakespeare does - each with its 
scenes drawn from real-life ... I finish with a conclusion - an epilogue again 
as the chorus does in Shakespeare.  In it I gather the threads together and 
give the result... 
This is more than structure for structure's sake.  It provides the architectural framework of a 
judgment, to ensure that the issues are clearly stated, the relevant facts and law are 
appropriately analysed and a conclusion is reached that clearly reveals the reasoning process.  
The judgment should flow logically and in an organised manner from the introduction to the 
conclusion. 
Step I Start before the beginning
The judgment writing process starts well before the end of the case, and well before a pen is put 
to paper or a dictaphone raised.  In fact, it should start before the case begins.  A great deal 
depends on the preparation for the case, which includes reading court documents (pleadings, 
affidavits, witness statements, the depositions, presentments or indictments) to identify the 
contested issues.  It may also involve consideration of the legal principles or evidentiary rules 
that are likely to arise in the course of the hearing.  AU of this assists the judge to understand 
the issues, even before the trial begins. 
In many courts, written outlines of argument, openings, chronologies, statements of agreed 
facts, flowcharts or other documents must be filed before the trial begins.  These also assist the 
judge's preparation.  With a sound grasp of the case, the judge can then ensure that counsel 
opens with a focus and direction that will ultimately help form the judgment.  Good advocates 
will generally do that of their own accord, striving to present the material sufficiently cogently, 
coherently and concisely to provide at least the cornerstones of a judgment favourable to their 
case. 
In practical terms, a simple request that each party articulate the live issues (which frequently 
change, even from recently filed case outlines) can in itself achieve a great deal.  Above all, it 
helps bring definition to the case both for counsel and judge.  The issues, once clearly stated, 
provide the reference points for the hearing, for rulings on relevance and admissibility of 
evidence, for note-taking and, ultimately, for the judgment itself. 
The judge's note-taking method is an integral part  of judgment writing.  It is particularly 
important in fact-rich cases, in order to marshal voluminous or complex material.  The ideal 
methodology is personal, even idiosyncratic, but we offer the following hints.  Each issue as 
outlined by counsel can be identified, perhaps set out on a separate notepad page.  During the 
hearing, the relevant parts of the evidence, references and cross-references in transcript or 
notes, as well as any observations, can be gathered together there.  Judges then have at their 
fingertips most of the material required to write about and make findings about particular 
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4   Lord Denning, The Family Story, 1991, Butterworths, London, pp 207-208. 3
issues.  In this regard, it may also be helpful to use topic headings, preferably in a contrasting 
colour, in the course of noting the evidence. judges who use electronic transcript and software 
such as Transcript Analyser or Brief Analyser, may make such notations electronically.  These 
headings or notes provide considerable assistance in navigating the evidence when writing the 
judgment. 
Of course a judgment cannot be concluded until the  case has been heard in its entirety.  
However, that does not preclude a judge from working on a draft judgment during the hearing, 
in particular, much of the background, including any relevant chronology, can be prepared.  
This will help a judge recall the material if, for any reason, a case is adjourned part-heard or the 
judgment needs to be reserved for delivery at a later time. 
Step 2       Use the first page
According to one expert,

 the first page of a judgment is "prime real estate" and in a well 
constructed judgment, "the front page says it all".  It is important to emphasise that the sound 
and clear construction of the first page is as much for the judge as for the reader.  It sets the 
foundation and maps the course of the judgment. 
The beginning of the judgment should be concise and uncluttered by unnecessary detail, such as 
the recitation of pleadings, legislation or case law.  Try to set the scene simply and clearly, as a 
prelude to any further or complex description or analysis of the case.  Set out succinctly the 
issues for determination.  The reader should not have to sift through the judgment to find them.  
The judgment should readily disclose where it is heading and any relevant background. 
As an essential ingredient of good communication, the start of a judgment should be interesting.  
The conventional opening to the effect: "This is an application pursuant to s 23A of the 
Limitation of actions Act 1958 for an order that..." is neither interesting, nor the most effective 
way to inform the reader of what is to follow.  It  has always been shunned by some, most 
notably Denning LJ.  In his famous "bluebell time in Kent" judgment,

 for example, Lord 
Denning skillfully described what the case was about in just three introductory paragraphs.  He 
set the scene - the facts founding the claim, the nature of the claim and the issue for the court to 
resolve: 
"It happened on April 19, 1964.  It was bluebell time in Kent.  Mr and Mrs Hinz 
had been married some 10 years, and they had four children, all aged nine and 
under.  The youngest was one.  Mrs Hinz was a remarkable woman.  In addition to 
her own four, she was foster-mother to four other children.  To add to it, she was 
two months pregnant with her fifth child. 
on this day they drove out in a Bedford Dormobile van from Tonbridge to Canvey 
Island.  They took all eight children with them.  As they were coming back they 
turned into a lay-by at Thumham to have a picnic tea.  The husband, Mr Hinz, was 
at the back of the Dormobile making the tea.  Mrs Hinz had taken Stephanie, her  
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5 Professor James Raymond, former Professor of Rhetoric at the University of Alabama. 
6  Hinz v Berry [19701 2 QB 40 at 42. 4
third child, aged three, across the road to pick bluebells on the opposite side.  
There came along a Jaguar car driven by Mr Berry, out of control.  A tyre had 
burst.  The Jaguar rushed into this lay-by and crashed into Mr Hinz and.the 
children.  Mr Hinz was frightfully injured and died a little later.  Nearly all the 
children were hurt.  Blood was streaming from their heads.  Mrs Hinz, hearing the 
crash, turning round and saw this disaster.  She ran across the road and did all she 
could.  Her husband was beyond recall.  But the children recovered. 
An action has been brought on her behalf and on behalf of the children for 
damages against Mr Berry, the defendant.  The injuries to the children have been 
settled by various sums being paid.  The pecuniary loss to Mrs Hinz by reason of 
the loss of her husband has been found by the judge to be some £115,000; but 
there remains the question of the damages payable to her for nervous shock - the 
shock which, she suffered by seeing her husband lying in the road dying, and the 
children strewn about.” 
Not all legal writers have the stature, the skill or the ability of Denning LJ.  Certainly, to copy 
him is not necessarily a good idea.  But one can learn from gifted writers and emulate the finer 
points of their judgment structure. 
If old habits are hard to break, or "writer's block" sets in, a practical tip is to start the judgment
as if talking to a colleague in chambers, or an intelligent but non-legal neighbour. 
Step 3 Deal with the history and the facts  
Judgments have traditionally begun with a description of the litigation to date, including a 
recitation of the pleadings.  This makes for heavy reading and should not be included unless it 
is essential to an understanding of the issues to be decided.  When describing how he avoided 
all reference to pleadings and orders, Denning LJ described them as "mere lawyer's stuff".

Sometimes it will be necessary to recite a history of the litigation or a narrative of the facts, but 
mostly it will not.  Overall, it is liberating for the judge as well as the reader to move away from 
a laborious recounting of every step in the litigation and the facts from A to Z. Only the facts or 
the history relevant to what is to be decided should be included.  This is a particular challenge 
in cases where, for example, there is a complex history of litigation or a" cradle to the grave" 
factual scenario, as commonly encountered in family law or contested will cases. 
Although it is rarely necessary to include the details of interlocutory proceedings, there are 
exceptions.  For example, a vigorous contest about discovery may be relevant when there is an 
allegation of concealment of assets and a related dispute as to documentary proof of their 
existence or whereabouts, or where credit generally is in issue.  The simple and reliable rule is 
that if nothing ultimately turns upon it, it should be left out. 
The facts may be discussed in at least three parts of the judgment: 
1. in the introduction, to identify issues or to add context or colour 
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7  Denning, op cit n 4. 5
2. as part of a brief general narrative, early in the judgment, to establish time, place or 
order of events 
3.  in deciding the issues of fact or law, including credibility. 
Care must be exercised when dealing with facts, to  include no more than are necessary.  A 
narrative of facts, some relevant and some not, is  likely to distract and confuse the reader.  
Although it is tempting for a judge to demonstrate mastery of voluminous material by including 
the detail, a sound grasp is best demonstrated by distilling the facts to those necessary to resolve 
the dispute and explain the reasoning. 
Complex facts can be difficult to handle in a concise and balanced way.  The clearest example 
is in a family law case involving a myriad of allegations and counter-allegations, spanning a 
lengthy period.  These cases are rarely confined to discrete transactions or events, typical of a 
contractual dispute or a personal injuries claim.  They highlight the importance of the start of 
the judgment.  Provided the direction of the judgment is clear and "the front page" sets the 
scene, only those facts pertaining to five issues need be addressed. 
By way of illustration, in a case as to the division of matrimonial property, a history of property 
transactions throughout the marriage may be set out in the parties' material.  Generally it should 
not form part of the reasons for judgment.  But if the case involves a tracing exercise, in order 
to track moneys or assets claimed by one to be concealed by the other, it is clearly germane and 
should be included.  Even then, those parts of the history which are agreed can be dealt with 
succinctly. 
For example: "The parties agree that between 1981 and 1993 they bought and sold 
three homes.  They further agree that the proceeds of each sale were 
used towards the purchase of the next home." 
Findings on the disputed facts can then be made.  There is no need to labour the process by 
reciting every aspect of the evidence.  It is sufficient simply to summarise the area of dispute 
and to make a finding.  Naturally that finding must be supported by reasons.  The knack is to 
give sufficient reasons to clearly and briefly explain the decision.  There is no need for the 
reasons to incorporate "an extended intellectual dissertation upon the chain of reasoning'.

The credibility of the parties or witnesses is often an important part of the fact-finding process.  
Views differ as to where findings of credit should be made.  According to some, they should be 
set out early in the judgment.  Others include them when dealing with particular disputes.  
Largely, it will depend on the case.  Where a party's credit is integral to the major areas of 
dispute, and there is a clear view as to his or her credit overall, then it may be convenient to 
note the findings early in the reasons for judgment.  Where, on the other hand, credit is relevant 
to some disputed facts but not others, or where a witness has been apparently honest in some 
respects but not others, it may be more convenient to deal with credit as and when it arises in 
relation to a particular issue. 
In making a finding on credit, it is sufficient to indicate a preference for one body of evidence 
over another and to explain the preference. (For example, because of the consistency of the 
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8  Athens v Randwick city council [20021 NSWCA 83. 6
evidence, the existence of corroboration or support by other evidence, a logical appeal, or 
because it was given in a reasonable manner.) It is usually unnecessary or undesirable to find 
that a witness was untruthful.  It is suggested that a finding of dishonesty should be made only 
where the circumstances warrant it, for example, where there is an allegation of fraud or where 
there has been blatant dishonesty on matters critical rather than peripheral to resolution of the 
dispute. 
There is a distinction between a rejection of the evidence of a witness and a finding that a 
witness has deliberately lied.  In Smith v NSW Bar Association,
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Brennan, Dawson, Toohey and 
Gaudron JJ pointed out that something additional to rejection of particular evidence is needed 
in order to establish deliberate lies.  Deane j discussed some of the factors which lead to 
difficulty for a judge in determining whether a witness has deliberately lied:
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"Unless it be truly necessary for the purpose of disposing of the particular case, 
however, a specific finding that a party or witness has deliberately given false 
evidence should ordinarily not be made.  Ordinarily, a party or other witness will 
not be concerned or entitled to set out to establish that, if his or her oral evidence 
is ultimately found to be mistaken, the mistake was an honest one.  As a 
consequence, material which serves only to establish that a party or other witness 
subjectively believes that his or her evidence is correct is likely to be inadmissible 
in the proceedings in which the evidence is given.'
Step 4       Set out the law
It is essential for the judge to identify and set out the legal principles applied in arriving at the 
decision.  There is generally no need for a lengthy dissertation in a first instance judgment, 
although there will be occasions in superior trial courts when judgments should contain more 
expansive statements of law.  Appellate courts, most of the time, discuss the law in greater 
depth than is called for in first instance judgments.  In  The Australian judiciary,  Professor 
Campbell and Professor Lee write of ongoing concern about the length and prolixity of 
judgments.
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in an address to judges of the Supreme Court of New South Wales, Justice Mahoney, President 
of the New South Wales Court of Appeal, said:
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"Judgments should refer shortly to the principles of law relevant to the 
determination of the question in dispute.  If you do not remember to do this, then 
on appeal it may be argued that you did not know what the principles of law were 
or, indeed, that you did not know what you were deciding. 
Sometimes the formulation of the question of law will be involved in, or 
overlapped by, the formulation of the question to be decided.  But it may go 
beyond it.  What will be necessary in formulating the question of law will, of 
course, depend on the particular case.” 
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9 (1992) 176 CLR 256 at 268; see also Kirby J in State Rail Authority of NSW v Earthline Constructions Pty Ltd (in liq,)
(1999) 160 ALR 588 at 617-618. 
10  Smith v NSW Bar Association (1992) 176 CLR 256 at 271.
11    Campbell and Lee, op cit n 2, p 230. 
12    Justice Mahoney, "The Writing of a judgment", Supreme Court Annual Conference, 23 June l995. 7
When citing from a decided case, the passage of the judgment should be chosen carefully and 
frugally.  Only so much of it as expresses the proposition in question should be quoted.  Ideally, 
that may amount to no more than one or two sentences, rather than a paragraph, or several 
paragraphs.  Of course, there are times when citing a longer part of a judgment may be 
necessary. 
Often, a legal principle can be stated by paraphrasing, rather than by direct quotation.  This 
approach makes judgments easier to read.  The authority for the proposition of law should be 
given, either immediately before or immediately after the proposition, or as a footnote or 
endnote.  The manner of citing authorities for legal principles is a choice made by the judgment 
writer, and may depend on whether the judge's court has adopted particular judgment writing 
guidelines or protocols. 
To illustrate how a lengthy part of a previous judgment can be summarised, consider the 
following authority, as to the test to be applied in determining whether a discovered document 
is subject to a claim of legal professional privilege.  Gleeson CJ, Gaudron and Gummow JJ said 
in a joint judgment:
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"58.  At first sight, sole purpose appears to be a bright-line test, easily understood 
and capable of ready application.  Many disputes as to its application could 
be resolved simply by examining the documents in question ... If the only 
way to avoid the apparently extreme consequences of the sole purpose test is 
to say that it should not be taken literally, then it loses its supposed virtue of 
clarity. 
59. One of the considerations prompting rejection of the pre-existing test was 
that it was unduly protective of written communications within corporations 
and bureaucracies.  The sole purpose test goes to the other extreme... 
60. A dominant purpose test was sufficient to defeat the claims for privilege in 
Grant v Downs, and Waugh.  The reason why Barwick CJ, the House of 
Lords, and the New Zealand Court of appeal preferred that test was that they 
were unable to accept, as either necessary or desirable, the apparent 
absoluteness and rigidity of a sole purpose test.  If the only way to avoid that 
absoluteness and rigidity is to water down the sole purpose test so that, in its 
practical application, it becomes more like the dominant purpose test, then it 
should be abandoned.  Either the test is too strict, or it lacks the clarity 
which the respondent claims for it. 
61. It would be possible to seek to formulate a new test, such as that adopted by 
Jacobs j in Grant v Downs, or Deane j in Waterford, in a further attempt to 
adjust the necessary balance of competing policies.  To do so, however, 
would produce only confusion. As a practical matter, the choice presently 
confronting this Court is between sole purpose and dominant purpose. The 
dominant purpose test should be preferred. it strikes a just balance, it 
suffices to rule out claims of the kind considered in Grant v Downs and 
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13   Esso Australia Resources Ltd v The Commissioner of Taxation (1999)201 CLR 49 at [58]-[61] (references omitted).8
  Waugh,  and it brings the common law of Australia into conformity with 
other common law jurisdictions."
  
In deciding a claim of legal professional privilege, that judgment could be paraphrased as 
follows: 
"In Esso Australia Resources Limited v The Commissioner of Taxation, the High 
Court, by a majority, adopted the dominant purpose test.  In their joint judgment, 
Gleeson CJ, Gaudron and Gummow JJ discussed the sole purpose test, established 
in Grant v Downs, and the manner in which it had been applied, and concluded: 
'As a practical matter, the choice presently confronting this Court is 
between sole purpose and dominant purpose.  The dominant purpose test 
should be preferred."'
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Of course, it would be necessary to describe the dominant purpose test, and then to apply it to 
the disputed document or documents in the instant case. 
Step 5 State the conclusion
As the beginning of the judgment introduces the subject matter, the conclusion should resolve 
each of the issues identified at the start.  The ending should contain no new material, whether 
factual or legal, which has not previously been discussed. 
Some judges choose to announce the result at the start of the judgment.  Others, perhaps the 
majority, announce their decision at the end.  There is no "correct" view.  Traditionally, the 
decision is given at the end, thereby providing a logical flow to the judgment.  Those who 
favour stating the decision at the beginning, justify doing so to ease the tension for those with 
an interest in the outcome of the case.  They also acknowledge that most readers turn to the last 
page first in any event. 
Whether to maintain the conventional approach or to declare the outcome at the start is a matter 
of personal preference.  Ultimately the choice may  be influenced by the type of case.  For 
example, when sentencing a prisoner or deciding a dispute concerning the residence of children, 
revealing the decision immediately may be more humane, especially if the reasons for that 
pronouncement are lengthy and may take some time. 
How the decision is reached must be evident.  This is accomplished by adopting a transparent 
reasoning process, dealing with both the relevant facts and law.  Whatever has influenced the 
decision should be stated in sufficient detail to thoroughly explain it. Some writers have 
described the task of the judge as being one of persuasion.
15
 Arguably, the real obligation is to 
explain, publicly, how a decision has been reached, rather than to persuade the reader.
16 
After completing the decision, the proposed orders and relief granted should be stated. 
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14  Ibid at [61]. 
15 See references in n 2. 
16 See, for example, Gibbs j in Russell v Russell (1976) 134 CLR 495 at 520. 9
Step 6 Choose an appropriate style 
Use plain language 
Judgments should be easy to read.  The use of plain, everyday language helps to achieve this.  
Unless there is a need for it, technical language and legal jargon should be avoided.  This does 
not require judges to resort to an artificial, simplistic writing style, but rather to use normal and 
sensible words and phrases.  Consider the following example: 
Original: "The argument as applied to the instant case is, in essence, that prior to 
and at the time of the rezoning application the nature of the project was 
clearly understood to be a condominium development." 
Plain language "Counsel argues in this case that both before and at the time of the 
rewrite: rezoning application the project was clearly understood to be a 
condominium development." 
Develop a style with which you are comfortable 
Judges develop their own techniques for writing judgments. justice Mailhot of the Quebec 
Court of Appeal and judge Carnwath of the Ontario Court of justice observed:
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"One does not learn how to write well by simply reading textbooks.  Only 
repeated practice of writing, together with an awareness of the importance of 
effective communication, can lead to favourable results.' 
Each judge has an individual manner of expression.  judgments should be expressed in a 
language and style which suits the decision-maker.  As has already been observed, there are 
many admirers of the language and style of Lord Denning.  Few could, with any success, or it is 
suggested should, attempt to write in his distinctive way.  It is generally better for judges to 
write in their own style rather than mimicking another's, which does not come naturally and is 
bound not to read naturally either. 
It is sometimes suggested that style should not be confused with substance and, that in writing 
judgments, it is substance rather than style which is important.  This infers a conflict between 
style and substance.  That this is not so is cogently argued by Edward Berry, the distinguished 
Canadian Professor of English and author, who has taught judgment writing to several 
generations of North American judges.
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When choosing a writing style, the judge should always be conscious of the effect of the 
judgment and particular findings on those who are concerned with it.  Care should be taken to 
avoid injection of personal views, by adhering to the purpose of the judgment.  This 
consideration may temper an inclination to humour,  irony, trenchant criticism, anger or 
morality, although there are occasions when humour or the expression of moral value may be 
appropriate.
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17 Mailhot and Carnwarth, op cit n 2, p 3. 
18 Berry, op cit n 2, pp 75 -76. 
19  Kirby, op cit n 2, pp 11 I- 1 25. 10
Simplify paragraph and sentence structure and composition 
In composing judgments, careful thought should be given to both paragraph and sentence 
structure and composition.  For example: 
Original: "In this situation, I am of the opinion that the evidence that Mr Harris has 
given is somewhat inconclusive." 
Alternative: "Mr Harris' evidence is inconclusive."
In addition to using plain language, employing shorter sentences, wherever practicable, is 
helpful.  When long sentences cannot be avoided, they should be preceded and followed by 
shorter sentences, as variety in sentence composition retains the reader's interest and facilitates 
the flow of the judgment. 
Paragraphs can also vary in length, from as short as one sentence, to many sentences.  It is often 
effective to begin and end each paragraph with a transitional sentence, providing a link to the 
preceding and following paragraphs. 
Use paragraph numbers, headings and subheadings 
It is increasingly common to see numbered paragraphs in judgments, and for headings and 
subheadings to be used.  Whether this is done is really a matter of preference for the judge or 
court.  One positive consequence of numbered paragraphs is that it greatly assists in directing 
attention to a portion of a judgment.  Using headings and subheadings is also helpful to those 
seeking to find a particular part of a judgment.  It may also assist the judge by providing a 
checklist to ensure that all matters needing attention have been dealt with. 
Use active rather than passive voice 
For easier reading, employ the active, rather than the passive voice.  This creates a more direct 
impact.  Two simple examples illustrate this proposition. 
Example 1 
Passive voice:  "He was acquitted by the jury". 
Active voice:  "The jury acquitted him". 
Example 2 
Passive voice: "It was reported by the engineer that the bridge was structurally sound and 
safe". 
Active voice: "The engineer said that the bridge was structurally sound and safe." 
Avoid Latin expressions and legalese 
Although a judgment is a legal decision, resorting to formal language, including Latin phrases 
or expressions, should be avoided, unless there is  a good reason to use such language or 
phrases.  Some Latin expressions have become part of everyday language and their use cannot 
be avoided, for example, subpoena, quorum and affidavit.  Other expressions, such as  viva 11
voce, inter alia or nunc pro tunc  can readily be substituted with expressions such as "oral", 
"among others" and "immediately'. 
Consistent with the aim of using plain language, expressions such as "the said", "hereinabove 
mentioned" or "it is therefore ordered, adjudged and decreed" should not be used.  There are 
suitable substitutes for such words and phrases.  By writing clearly and concisely, the subject 
matter being discussed should be apparent, without resort to these expressions. 
Avoid redundancy 
It is tempting to explain the reasons for a decision by reference to the complicated nature of the 
proceeding or the issues to be resolved.  Such rumination in a judgment increases its length, but 
does little to improve its quality.  There is no purpose in saying, for example: 
"After reviewing all of the evidence, and weighing  carefully the competing 
arguments advanced by the parties, I have decided that..." 
Judges must carefully consider the evidence and the competing submissions made on behalf of 
the parties.  There is no need to say that this has been done.  Whether there has been a proper or 
sufficient scrutiny of the evidence, and whether the arguments advanced, especially by the 
losing party, have been sufficiently considered should be apparent to the reader from the 
contents of the judgment. 
Step 7       Edit the judgment
It is commonly said that there is no such thing as good writing, there is only good rewriting.  
Preparing a draft judgment is hard work.  But the hardest work begins when the draft judgment 
is finished.  Good editing ensures that a judgment is lucid, thorough, coherent, concise and has 
transparent reasoning.  It identifies flaws, such as the use of discriminatory language.  Editing is 
a manifold task that should include: 
· using a checklist of topics or issues to ensure that the judgment embraces all that it should 
and that all issues are resolved 
· checking names, dates, figures and other data for accuracy 
· eliminating repetition 
· excluding irrelevant findings of fact 
· pruning lengthy quotations of law, passages of transcript, or extracts from affidavits or 
documents tendered in evidence 
· removing and replacing Latin expressions, jargon or outmoded expressions 
· eliminating explanations of the obvious 
· using the active voice rather than the passive voice, wherever possible 
· simplifying lengthy, complex sentences and adopting short sentences, where appropriate 
· checking the use of punctuation to avoid ambiguity and facilitate comprehension 
· scrutinising the length and content of paragraphs. 12
Of course, time is a factor in determining how much editing is possible.  But even when a 
decision must be delivered urgently, some editing is still required, especially to ensure that the 
decision covers all the issues raised for determination.  Where there is no immediate pressure of 
time (other than the imperative to deliver a decision as expeditiously as practicable), a more 
thorough revision should be undertaken.  The more a judgment is edited or revised, the better it 
will be, within reason. 
Conclusion
For most judges, preparing judgments is the most demanding, challenging and even stressful 
part of judicial life.  Paradoxically, it can also be the most creative and rewarding.  The hints we 
have offered do not purport to provide a recipe for easy or fast judgment writing.  But with the 
clarity that flows from sound structure and style,  the writing process is likely to be more 
streamlined and judgments are likely to be shorter.  For time-poor judges, with the pressure of 
case upon case, it is an attractive spin-off that judgments which are easier to read are likely to 
be easier to write. 
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